Evaluation

Evaluation from adam tooley

final magazine

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This week we will start our evaluation and I can say that this will be a good way to round up on my magazine. It allows to see what are strengths were particularly and what we feel we could if added. Overall I am happy with my magazine because I feel it is professional looking and gives off a pop vibe! We will be complete if this after we hand in our final magazine cover 

Drafting and Planning

this is the improvement i had decided to make to my masthead and main cover line so far. i haven't quite finished but i am intending to experiment with typography and size. i have taken direct inspiration from Q magazine

Drafting and planning: Contents Page Altering

i'm going to rearrange my content page's images and content to match those of Q magazine's style which is my primary research After receiving feedback on my final draft, my main concern was to change the photograph of the cover star on the Contents Page as it looked pretty much identical to the photograph on the double page spread, including the pose. This gave me the opportunity to use a different type of camera shot and therefore provide more of a range of photography in the magazine.

this is the kind of layout i am looking to follow for my contents page which also needs improving. 

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Next steps:

• Change the overall layout of my contents page
• change the photography used in my magazine overall 
• I am going to move my Images around to position them better, so a correlation is made between my artist features and my stories for the specific month. I am also going to make two of them smaller to fit the space available. 
• I am going to try and increase my page number count to 50 from 40 (this will only be possible if I change the page drastically enough)
• From looking into my research into similar products, I am hoping to add a editors note section as this is a common feature on contents page for magazines of a similar genre. 
• I have added boxes around each heading and its stories that come with it - this defines them and also separates each section. 

feedback on final draft

1) YES

2) YES

3) NO

4) POP?

5) YES

6) NO

7) YES

8) YES

9) YES

Above is the comments received on my final draft. overall i am pleased with what i got as feedback. however the things i failed on were basic mistakes which can be easily rectified 

1. I have submitted a front cover, contents page and double page spread, so i have met this criteria 
2. I have included 4 images - all use different camera shots
3. I have all of the essential conventions except  Date line
4. My music genre isn't as clear as i would like it to be. My teacher immediately said 'POP' yet put a ? next to it.
5. On my contents page I have a section called 'ON THE COVER' my teacher is unable to link what stories under there to the cover lines on my front cover. 
6. I currently have 40 pages in my magazine and not 38.
7. My double page spread numbers (14 and 15) correspond to what I have put on my contents page.
8. My point size is a suitable size. 
9. I have some syntax, grammar and/or spelling errors which need rectifying.
10. The image on my front cover currently does present a musical artist to teacher. The musical mise-en-scene is not coming across. / I need to add more features to my contents page - for example live reviews and subscription possibilities. / My teacher poses a very good question, which I need to think about. This involves looking at my article and editing accordingly.  

Class General Feedback

below are some of the common errors the class as a wholehave made in our final draft. This is something that everyone needs to improve by the time the final one must be submitted  

• Inconsistency of cover lines from the ones featuring on the front cover to the ones included on the contents page. 
• Contents page information is too much - Long unnecessary sentences/quotes explaining what the story is about. This gives to much insight for the reader, which could lead to them losing interest.
• Sometimes genre is not always obvious.
• Minimum of FOUR original photographs needed - there must also be a difference between them. They cant all be of a medium close up.
• Contents page have a lack of features
• A weekly or monthly magazine will NOT feature an artist promoting a 'new song' or 'new single' 

double page spread

The double page spread wasn't improved on greatly except I added more content to my article which I felt was very successful! Changing some of the typography and improving picture quality and lighting will make my double page spread more interesting and inviting! Could extend more on the article and add more to it. Finally changing the title and typography